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Having a good university degree guarantees people good job. a To what extent do you agree?

#university #guarantees #people #job
A good
university
 has all the
facility
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facilities
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 either it is faculty or it is structure so
good
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a good
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education
 guarantees a good
job
not
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, not
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 the
university
. A good
university
 provides good educated
people
 and they work for
thecountry
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the country
 and become good employees. If good workers are not there in the
country
than
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then
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 how a
country
 will develop
.
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?
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 The economy of the
country
also
 depends on
the
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apply
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good scientists, engineers, politicians, businessmen etc. So it is very necessary to get
the
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an
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education
 from a good
university
. A
goood
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good
god
job
 is
also
 provided for the good educated
people
. Almost every
people
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person
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 on the Earth
want
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wants
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 to study
in
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at
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good
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a good
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university
 so that they will get a good
job
 after
education
. But, some
people
 who do not study at a good
university
also
 get good
job
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jobs
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 because they
studied
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study
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 well on their own taking
help
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the help
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 of online study. The CEO of the
goodle
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Goodle
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 Sumit Narang has completed his
education
in
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at
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harvard
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Harvard
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university
 and got
very
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a very
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 good
job
. But, the first president of America George Clinton
has
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did
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 not
studied
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study
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 in a good
university
 still he became the president. After all the government of the
country
 should pay attention to
increase
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increasing
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 the value of the universities and
people
 should get educated
from
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at
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 a good reputed
university
.
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structure
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion which are essential components of IELTS Writing Task 2. The introduction should present the topic and your thesis statement, while the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your position. Make sure these sections are clearly defined and effectively communicate your argument.
cohesion
The logical structure of the essay needs improvement. Ideas should flow naturally from one to the next, with clear paragraphs for each main idea. Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs, such as 'firstly', 'however', 'in addition', etc.
task response
Task achievement is limited as the response only somewhat addresses the prompt. You need to fully respond to all aspects of the question and clearly state to what extent you agree or disagree. Enhance the response with relevant, specific examples, and ensure you analyse these examples to explain how they support your main points.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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