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The chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day, and also the average price of their tickets.

The chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day, and also the average price of their tickets.
#passengers #train #station #hour #price #tickets
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The table
provide
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provides
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 information about
time
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the time
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 of passengers arriving at
train
Correct article usage
the train
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starion
Correct your spelling
station
 daily every two hours.
In addition
,
price
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the price
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 of tickets.
However
, the head of
houre
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house
 is the peak
number
. 
Overall
, the
night
 trip was less
number
 of passenger
comparing
Wrong verb form
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 to
morning
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the morning
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 trip. With begin,
early
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the early
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 morning period is similar count to the period of 8
p
.
m
 by difference 30 les passenger at
night
are
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is
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 480, 450 respectively.
On
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At
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 8 a.
m
 the
number
 is fewer than 12
p
.
m
 by 10
passenger
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passengers
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 which is 690, 700 which is the highest
flight
numbers
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number
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 along period.
Otherwise
. On
afternoon
Correct article usage
the afternoon
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flight
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the insignificant
number
 is 290 following the lowest
number
 is 230
in
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at
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 4.
p
.
m
, but after
that
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 the optimal
night
flight
 is 6.
p
.
m
by
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with
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 670 passengers,
thus
,
on
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at
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10p.
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10 p.m
m
 slight
decresed
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decrease
number
by
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of
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 50 passengers. The profit of
flight
 is optimal spam was 8 a.
m
 in morning shift.
While
in
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on
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night
 shift was 12.pm and
then
 6.pm
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, night, p, m, flight with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number of passengers
  • arriving
  • train station
  • per hour
  • throughout the day
  • average ticket price
  • progressively increases
  • mid-afternoon
  • gradually decreases
  • peak
  • approximately
  • early morning
  • late evening
  • lowest
  • averaging
  • slight fluctuation
  • highest average price
  • observed
  • mid-morning
  • fluctuation
  • not significant
  • difference
  • relatively small
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