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Band 5.5

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The information given
on
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in
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 the table illustrates activities which unemployed people in the UK
busy
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were busy
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 with in 1982. The measures are given by percentages. Morning
persons
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people
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 who are unemployed,
overall
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, commonly busy with housework, shopping and job hunting
while
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 afternoon people waste their time with sitting
arround
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around
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In contrast
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, drinking is less popular among unemployers. One important future in the data is that contribution for do housework is 49% and 21% for morning and afternoon women respectively. The figure for
the
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apply
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shopping
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also
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is also
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 higher than other activities,
for
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example
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example,
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 26
percent
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per cent
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 for females who get up early.
On the other hand
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,
according to
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 the table, staying in bed is less popular for afternoon males and females with 1% and 0%, in term. Another necessary fact is that figures for drinking
is
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are
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 less than 3% for
unemployers'
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employers
 given types.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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