The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the trend of how many people who were originally from
Australia
and came from another country
staying
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stayed
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in the
cities
,
towns
and rural
areas
in 1995 and 2010. It is known that people staying in the
cities
are always far higher compared to those who
lived
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live
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in
towns
and rural
areas
. In 1995, Australian
citizen
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citizens
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who were both
gave birth
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born
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in
Australia
and outside
Australia
in
majority
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the majority
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lived in the
cities
. The second highest
number
of
citizen
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citizens
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lived in
towns
,
while
the lowest
number
of
poeple
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people
lived in the rural
areas
.
Similarly
, in 2010, the
number
of all Australian
citizen
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citizens
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living in the
cities
were
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was
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three to four times higher than those who lived in
towns
and rural
areas
. The
number
of people who lived in the
cities
increased
from
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in
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the
last
15 years,
while
for
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apply
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those who lived in
towns
and rural
areas
were
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apply
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significantly decreased to below 20.
Overall
, there were different
number
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numbers
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of
poeple
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people
who were the origin of
Australia
and
the
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apply
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newcomer
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newcomers
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staying in the
cities
,
towns
, and rural
areas
in the
year
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years
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1995 and 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, cities, towns, areas, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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