The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The graphs illustrate the proportion of

time

career-men

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career men

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and

career-women

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career women

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spent on various

activities

in a nation in the

year

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years

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1958 and 2008.

Overall

, working has always been the

dominants

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dominant

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activity

which

then

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is then

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followed by sleeping. The least popular

activities

in 1958 were

traveling

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travelling

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to work and playing sports,

whereas

in 2008 the most uncommon

activity

was going out with friends or family. The most common

activities

done by the workers were working and sleeping. Working

time

increased from 33% to nearly half

while

sleeping

time

decreased from 32% to a quarter.

Moreover

time

spent

to hang

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hanging

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out with colleagues

were

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was

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down from 19% to 6%, which made it the least popular

activity

in the

year

2008.

Furthermore

, in the

year

1958, the least popular

activities

were commuting to work which was only 2%.

However

this

number jumped to 8% in the

year

2008 which made it

same

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the same

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with

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playing sports.

In addition

time

spent by the workers to relax at home increased significantly from 8% to 13%, which made it the third most popular

activity

done by the workers in the

year

2008.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

184 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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