Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram illustrates the information about two new sites
predictabl
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predictable
predictably
build a new shopping
mall
for the different
region
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in Brandfield The two
propsal
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proposed
site
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are located along
railway
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the railway
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which
across
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on road and river which
is increase
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the population for indeed shopping.
However
,
north
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of the city center is beside to railway which could serve
for
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both future
mall
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malls
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. As you see we have
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a rallway
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rallway
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railway
in the
center
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of the city from north to
west
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the west
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as well as
in
north
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the north
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direction is the first probably place
front
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in front
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of the
hosing
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housing
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estate which is
cross
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across
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the road,
otherwise
the second one is
alonge
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a long
path in corner
besid
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beside
of
railway
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the railway
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just closed to
indestrial
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industrial
estate.  Regarding to proposal city center is located in between the
tow
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two
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location
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locations
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of
tow
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two
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future
mall
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malls
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where
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is
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across the river.
On the other hand
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devision
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division
you can see
galf
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the galf
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count
nearby
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near
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the first site.
futuer
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future
mall
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mall with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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