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The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figures below represent each
amount
 of
milk
 and butter consumption
according to
 different
age
 groups in a European country.
Firstly
, those who consume
milk
 the most are revealed in
age
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the age
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group
 of over 65 years old.
This
group
 intake
overall
 1900ml in a week and 70
percent
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per cent
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 of them preferred
low fat
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low-fat
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milk
.
However
, the
age
group
of
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under 25 years old drinks the least
amount
 of
milk
in
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weekly, which is about 1200ml.
On the other hand
 ,
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a 59percent
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59percent
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59 per cent
 of
the
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youngsters are reported to prefer
full fat
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full-fat
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milk
. In
age
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the age
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group
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groups
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 of 26 to 45 and 45 to 65 consumed pretty similar
amount
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amounts
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 of
milk
in
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apply
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weekly, which are each
of
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apply
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1650ml and 1670ml. Surprisingly, the
age
group
 of 45 to 65 is revealed as the consumer of the highest
amount
 of butter.
What the
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 interesting point is,
this
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that this
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group
 shows exactly half and half
preferrence
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preference
 between the two different
type
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types
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 of butters .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, milk, age, group, ml with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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