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these days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant period of time, either to find a job or study. there are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. do advantages outweight its disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many individuals are going abroad for some time, either to find
job
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 or to pursue
further
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 beneficial but they
also
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 face some challenges. I believe with
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experience from studying or working abroad, the advantages
outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantages.
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 with, going abroad does a
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 of job
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exposing
people
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 to a broader horizons of the world and adds a
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 of knowledge
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 with the contrasting culture from the home country.
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 in turn makes international students
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more educated in terms
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 world events and culture.
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 example, students who
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 gone abroad
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 more
in
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 how to communicate with international
people
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 rather than students who study domestically.
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, going abroad
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 opens a
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 more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 in career stakes which is a golden moment for
people
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 who seek better
job
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jobs
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 in other states.
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, there
are
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also
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 a negative side to travelling to other countries. With the difference
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 culture and language barrier, these can be a tough challenge for those who did not prepare well before immigrating.
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, a
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 of
people
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 fail to live comfortably in their dream host country
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language
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 barrier that limits their movement and productivity.
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,
this
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 will only be a boomerang for the dreams that many individuals have desired. In conclusion,
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 believe there are advantages and disadvantages regarding
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travelling
 to other countries
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 the
one
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ones
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 that we
were
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 not familiar with. It is important to prepare for everything before we are sure to immigrate to other states.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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