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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The first bar chart illustrates the proportion of
men
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 and women in a nation engaged in domestic work
such
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 as cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house.
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in
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second bar chart depicts the
time
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 spent by each gender on each task per day. The data measurement is in
minutes
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.
Overall
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, women spend more
time
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to do
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 housework than male.
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, cooking takes much
time
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, though
time
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 used in house repairing is less.
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, gentlemen are more responsible for changing and fixing than ladies.
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 with, the ratio between gents and ladies who cook is three to four, in which females spend 80
minutes
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 on it, which is 20 more
minutes
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 compared to
men
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. The women and
men
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 percentage for the cleaning task is approximately 63% and 40% respectively, and they take nearly 63
minutes
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 to clean,
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men
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 take only 45. On the other side, On average, only a small amount of
time
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 is spent on house repairs, which are primarily done by males spending an average of 20
minutes
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 on it. Males
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 take care of pets around 22% of the
time
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, spending nearly 20
minutes
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 a day doing so. Females, on the other side, spend only 10% of their
time
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 on pet care, which amounts to nearly 15
minutes
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 a day.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, time, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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