the graph shows the percentage of 18-25 year olds in unoversities of 4 countries. summarise the information
The Provided line graph gives data about a population
percentage
of specific
age Correct article usage
a specific
rang
(18-25) Correct your spelling
range
the
Correct word choice
and the
percentage
of 18-25 year olds in universities of four different countries between 1961 to 2011.
Looking from an overall
perspective, Malaysia
and Philippines
had a slight increase, Correct article usage
the Philippines
however
both had less Add a comma
however,
percentage
than two
other countries.
It is evident that the youth of Singapore and Correct article usage
the two
Thailand
were more interested in studying in universities than Malaysia
and Change preposition
in Malaysia
Philippines
. Correct article usage
the Philippines
Nonetheless
, they had varying trends. To begin
with, Thailand
ranked first
in 1961; also
it displayed a steadiness by tending to fall which fluctuated between 20 and 25% until 1991. Singapore did not provide the same trend like
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as
Thailand
in same
time duration. It had a sharp peak in 1971, Correct article usage
the same
nevertheless
, generally
it went up 20% compared to the Add a comma
generally,
first
year. After 1991, the percentage
of students’ population in Thailand
skyrocketed, and it was a little different for Singapore, at first
it showed a slight decline then
shot up.
The young learner community in Malaysia
and Philippines
uplifted throughout these years. Both of these countries had Correct article usage
the Philippines
a
stability and increase, but their positions in different Remove the article
apply
place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
in
which stability positioned in Change preposition
apply
first
decade of Correct article usage
the first
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the Philippines
Philippines
investigation of Change noun form
Philippine's
Philippines'
population
of 18 to 25-year-old pupils, Add an article
the population
a population
however
, in Malaysia
it was vice versa.Add a comma
Malaysia,
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