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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.
#percentage #australian #exports #four #countries
The graph below represents the different figures
of
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 Australian
export
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exports
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into
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to
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 four different countries from 1990 to 2012. The four
contries
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countries
 consist of Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
, and India. In 1990, the country where Australia sold their products the most was Japan, recording 27
percent
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per cent
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 of its amount of exports.The following country was
US
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the US
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, as of 10 percent.
However
, both
China
 and India showed pretty
similiar
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similar
 figures in that year, indicating 1 or 2
percent
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per cent
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 each. Interestingly, the
percentage
 of
export
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exports
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 to Japan
continuosly
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continuously
 dropped after it hit the highest
percentage
in
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 the beginning of the
years
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year
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. Meanwhile, the
percentage
 of
export
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exports
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 to
China
 drastically skyrocketed as time
goes
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 on. In 2012, the
percentage
 of Australian
export
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exports
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 to
China
 hit
the
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apply
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first place
as of
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close to 30
percentage
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per cent
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while
 the
other's
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other
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 graph showed
constant
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a constant
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 decrease.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, china, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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