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The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.

The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.
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The bar graph gives information about the time used by the British regarding three types of telephone calls (local fixed
line
, national-international fixed
line
, and
mobiles
) between 1995
to
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 2002. Generally, the
local-fixed
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local fixed
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line
 had a stable usage pattern,
while
 the other two call types tended to surge throughout the years. In reference to
local
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the local
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 network, there were about slightly above 70
billion
minutes
spend
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 in 1995, which
continously
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continuously
increase
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 until 90
billion
minutes
 in 1999,
then
finally
plummetting
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 to the initial amount
as
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in 2002. The national-international-fixed
line
 and
mobiles
, the number climbed within eight years. Even though the national-international and
mobiles
 have a significant time usage difference in the beginning, in which almost 40
billion
minutes
 and just above 0
minutes
 respectively,
but
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the
mobiles
 have a considerable growth which
make
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 in 2002 there were only 20
billion
minutes
 gap between those two
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