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Money offered for past-graduated research is limited. As a consequence, some people argue that financial support from the government should only be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects. plz write an essay for two body for agreement and one for disagreement

#money #research #consequence #people #support #government #subjects #plz #two #body #agreement #disagreement
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Nowadays,
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 technological progress, the amount of
research
which
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conducted by scientists or postgraduate students has increased. In
these kind
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 of situations, some individuals believe that the amount of money which is dedicated to professional
research
 is limited, and by notice
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this
 issue, it is better that the financial advocation cover scientific
research
instead
  of less valuable one. There is
common
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 belief that scientific
research
 has more definite benefits for society,
such
 as medical advancement, technological progress, and environmental solutions. By concentrating on scientific
research
, governments can ensure that limited funding is allocated to
endeavors
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 that have merit and
positive
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a positive
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 impact on the world.
Furthermore
, investigating
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scientific
research
 can contribute to economic growth.
On
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 their opinion,
this
 kind of
research
 not only could be beneficial for society but
also
 could be helpful for economic growth.
For example
, governments can share
this
research
 during international collaboration and receive funds or get help from other scientists
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 other parts of the world.
On the other hand
, some individuals think less common issues
such
 as history, literature, and art could be beneficial too, because they not only foster a sense of belonging and patriotism among people from all walks of life
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 but broaden horizons. In conclusion, I suppose there are more elements that show the significant importance of scientific
research
such
 as positive influence on the world and economic growth.
While
 we shouldn't neglect
this
 issue
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less common
research
also
 are essential for our children's futures.
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