The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.
The bar
chart
represents the amount
of annual salary
that had been paid to different workers
in comparison to especially doctors
in seven countries
over the world which were , France,the Czech Republic, Italy, Finland,Germany , Switzerland and The United States in 2004.
It is clear from the chart
that doctors
' annual salaries
in US dollars
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the
salaries
of the other workers
in the seven countries
in 2004.
There is a noticeable difference between Finnish doctors
and American
doctors
in salary
payments.
American
doctors
were paid around 120 thousands
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dollars
per year which was the highest amount
of salary
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the other hand, Finnish Change preposition
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doctors
were paid less than American
doctors
about 70 thousands
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of
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dollars
.
A closer examination of the figures for doctors
actually revealed the greatest amount
of annual salaries
in comparison to other workers
. Swiss doctors
had the second rank after American
doctors
in the rate of annual salaries
were paid almost 70 thousand dollars
per year. However
, the three mentioned countries
in the chart
which are Italy, the Czech Republic and Germany had the lowest amount
of annual salaries
for the rest of the workers
which was less than 25 thousand dollars
per year.
The chart
shows that doctors
were paid a higher amount
of money in contrast
to other workers
. This
would claim to look at the reasons why doctors
had the highest salary
rates. In
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governments
government
countries
should take an opportunity to raise the salaries
for
other Change preposition
of
workers
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