The demand for coaching services has grown significantly in the digital age, with online coaching platforms becoming prevalent. Some now feel online coaching is a superior option to in-person coaching. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary world, there
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a program of online coaching for students
from
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the
last
few years and the demand for
this
method of coaching services has increased dramatically. Some people
belief
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that
this
is the best option for students than
in person
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in-person
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coaching. I disagree with
this
statement and in
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essay, I will explain the justification to support my belief. The preponderant reason is that
the
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remote coaching needs some equipment like laptops, Wi-Fi,
smartphones
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and smartphones
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to attend the classes and many families are not able to afford them.
For instance
, laptops and smartphones are very expensive as they are more than 500 bucks and poor families are not able to afford that cost as they are earning less than $60 dollars a day.
Hence
this
method of coaching class is for rich families' kids as their parents can handle the cost
whereas
the in-person classes are affordable for all people.
However
, in the method of remote
tutoring
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tutoring,
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the children do not get
one
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on one
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one-on-one
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tutoring as there are many pupils on screen which
make
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it difficult for the tutor to give answers
as well
as
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and
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some of the tutors do not have too much knowledge of the technology.
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, my sister was taking the nursing drilling online and it was very difficult for the instructor to handle the technology and to join the class which
waste
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their ample time
as well
as
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she was not able to have a meeting with
teacher
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the teacher
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for
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doubts
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as he was tight in schedule.
Therefore
, online coaching needs some knowledge to handle the stuff and if you do not have it
then
it will waste your ample time. In conclusion, virtual drilling is
good
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a good
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way of learning and teaching as people do not need to go somewhere but it is not a better option than
face to face
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face-to-face
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instructing because in
directly
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coaching the student can get more attention from the educator.
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introduction
Ensure that you start your essay with a clear introduction paragraph, outlining your main argument. Avoid including reasons or justification for your viewpoint here; these should be explored in the body paragraphs.
cohesion
Develop clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to introduce the main point you will discuss. This helps the reader to understand the direction of your argument.
cohesion
Link your ideas with appropriate transition words and phrases to maintain the flow of your essay. This connects the points seamlessly and aids the reader in following your line of reasoning.
conclusion
Provide clear conclusions that restate your position and summarize the key points discussed in the essay. Avoid introducing new information or arguments in the conclusion.
task response
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task response
Ensure that your ideas are developed fully with explanations, examples, and details that support your main argument. Each paragraph should elaborate on a single main point.

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