The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie charts delineate the evolving employment statuses of Australian
graduates
across specific timeframes. Broadly,
while
the rate of
graduates
securing employment exhibited an upward trajectory, concomitant declines were observed in both unemployment and those opting for advanced academic pursuits. In 1980, exactly half of the
graduates
gravitated towards postgraduate studies, establishing it as the predominant choice.
This
dominance,
however
, witnessed a precipitous decline of 12% from that year to 1990, followed by a marginal contraction of merely 1% in the subsequent decade. In juxtaposition, the cohort of
graduates
assimilating into the workforce burgeoned notably during the 1990s, sustaining its momentum until 2000. In stark contrast, the unemployment metric in 1980 was a mere 10%, delineating a stark divergence of 40% when compared to those advancing to higher education.
While
a marginal escalation surfaced in the 1990s, the ensuing decade witnessed a significant downturn, culminating in a reduction of 4% by 2000. Intriguingly,
this
unemployment nadir persisted consistently throughout the observational span.
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