The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousands) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousands) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
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The bar chart illustrates the
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of males and females enrolled in higher education in Britain,
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full-time and part-time studies, during the past 21 years.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
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of
men
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and
women
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studying part-time increased.
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the figures for
women
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in part-time education rose, it was not true for
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that they dropped. Regarding the full-time students, beginning at roughly 1 million at the start of the period, the
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of
men
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declined significantly to over 800,000 after 10 years, after which it experienced a slight rise of almost 850,000 in 1991. Meanwhile, the figures for
women
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increased sharply from approximately 700,000 to around 800,000, reaching a peak of over 1 million
at the end
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of the period. With the
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of students engaging in part-time education,
men
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's numbers underwent a steady climb from around 100 to under 200 after 21 years. For
women
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, there were approximately 50,000 of them in 1970, but these numbers rose significantly to 200,000 in 1980, after experiencing a gradual rise in 1991.
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