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The map below shows the development of a seaside village between 1995 and present

The map below shows the development of a seaside village between 1995 and present
The maps
depicts
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depict
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 the development of the village of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 between 1995, and the present time. It is clear from the map that there are more houses built and new apartments. In 1995, there were houses in the north and rode, linking the housing area with a southern area. In east
north
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north,
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 there was a farmland and forest
park
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 close to the road.
In
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On
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 the corner of the
street
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street,
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 there is a hotel, and next to the
hotel
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hotel,
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 there
was
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is
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 a car
park
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.
In addition
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, there is a cafe in front of the hotel. In west south there were shops, and between the shops and the sea a fish market. In the present time. there are more houses built. The farmland became a golf and the Forest
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park
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Park
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removed
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was removed
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. The shops store become restaurants. The fish market transformed
to
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into
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 apartments. The car
park
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 has been removed. The cafe
as
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is
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same
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the same
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 as in 1995.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • evolution
  • seaside village
  • infrastructure
  • housing estates
  • commercialization
  • amenities
  • recreational facilities
  • demographics
  • sustainability
  • preservation
  • urbanization
  • tourism
  • accessibility
  • conservation
  • gentrification
  • land use
  • residential areas
  • urban planning
  • ecological footprint
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