You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed  in the UK.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given pie charts give information about the
reasons
why people stay in or leave from the
UK
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the most popular
reason
for staying
the
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in the
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UK
was the family/friend
category
, and the quality of life
were
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was
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the most popular leaving cause among the
participiants
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participants
. Turning to the first image, the
category
of family or
friend
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friends
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was the most said
reason
for staying
the
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in the
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UK
,
at
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as
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it represented
in
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apply
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the majority of all
reasons
(43%).
This
was followed by the categories of social life which
was
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were
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given as a
reason
by 21% of total
participiants
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participants
. Interestingly, the percentages of employment and financial
reasons
were the same and accounted for 15%. The
least
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lowest
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rate
was belonged
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belonged
has belonged
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the
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to the
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category
of language, just above
than
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apply
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one in ten. Looking more closely at the
secong
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second
figure,
in contrast
to the first image the
category
of family/friends represented
in
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apply
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the least popular
reason
at 9%, which was the most popular
reason
for staying. The most remarkable
reason
from
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for
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leving
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living
leaving
from the
UK
was the quality of life
and
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which
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accounted for 37%. The field of employment and financial
reasons
accounted for 18% and 24%, respectively. When these two
added
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were added
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together, they made 42%, collectively.
Finally
, the least popular cause was the weather, only 12% of total attendants gave the weather as a
reson
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reason
for leaving.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, uk, reason, category with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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