You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job.You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she/he would not enjoy going to college. explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Priyanka , Hope you are doing well , I
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received your letter
last
week regarding you are looking for advice
whether
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to go to college or try to get a job. I am very happy that you always consider me
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best adviser among your other friends and I would be grateful to get rid of you
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this
confusion.
Firstly
, Congratulations
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through your NEET exam for
diploma
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in Master in Pharmacy but as you
are
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already
holding
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a Bachelor's degree
of
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pharmacy so does not make any sense to attend the college.
Furthermore
, you would not enjoy the
repeatition
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repetition
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course as you have already
studed
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studied
in vast during your graduation.
Secondly
, I came to know that your father lost his job
last
year at the time of
COVID - 19
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COVID-19
, so if you will work and earn some money
then
it would be an advantage for your family too. As per your
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, you should try
job
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in
pharma
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companies
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, that experience will be useful for you in future.
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if you have confusion , please do not hesitate to reach out over
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phone. Regards P
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has a clear logical structure throughout, with each paragraph smoothly leading into the next. Use transition words to improve the flow.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, but could be enhanced by a more personalized touch or the use of the friend's name in the closing to mirror the opening.
coherence cohesion
While each paragraph does present a distinct idea, the paragraph structure could be improved for greater impact and clarity. Ideas may be further developed.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task more fully. While the main points are covered, they could be elaborated upon with more specific details and explanations to fully satisfy the prompt.
task achievement
The tone is generally suitable for a letter to a friend, maintaining a balance between formality and informality. Consider using more engaging language and expressions to strengthen the tone.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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