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coherence cohesion
Ensure sentences are well-constructed and paragraphs are cohesively linked to enhance overall readability. Avoid stray thoughts and maintain a clear, logical flow.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion should clearly address the prompt, with the conclusion summarizing the main points and reiterating your position effectively.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on supporting one main point with clear, relevant examples and explanations. Avoid introducing multiple ideas without sufficient support.
task achievement
Thoroughly address all parts of the task, ensuring you give ample discussion to both views in the prompt and presenting a clear opinion of your own.
task achievement
Clarify and develop your main ideas with specific, targeted explanations. Use examples that directly relate to and support the points you're making.
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When presenting examples, make sure they are directly relevant and add value to your argument. It's better to use one strong, detailed example than several weak or vague ones.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general