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In some countries, people prefer to rent their home rather than buy one. What are some advantages and disadvantages renting a house?

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In some countries, people prefer to rent their
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home
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homes
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 than buy one. There are some advantages and disadvantages about which we will discuss in that essay. Flexibility and mobility are
one
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some
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 of
pros
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the pros
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 of renting.
For example
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, if
person
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a person
the person
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do
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 not like where his or her
home
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 is located, with
rented
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a rented
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 residence they can just move to another
house
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 or apartment with
better
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 location. Meanwhile, if they buy
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house
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a house
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 and
then
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 they
do
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 not satisfied with something, it will be hard to move to another place. So,
according to
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 it flexibility and mobility
is
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 one of the key advantages of renting.
On the other hand
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,
while
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 living in
such
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 type of
home
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 you can face
with
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apply
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limited control and privacy. Usually in
rented
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the rented
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home
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 you should not do something like painting walls, adding shelves or changing furniture, because the landlord
don't
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 allow it,
in addition
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 landlord can come to check the conditions of the
house
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 whenever he or she wants, which means that you have limited privacy. All
that
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 things can cause stress, because you can not decide what to do with
place
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the place
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 where you live,
due to
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 it you can feel that you are not living here, you are just a guest.
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, there is a landlord
which
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 can come to you and it can cause,
that
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you will feel more
stressfull
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stressed
.
To conclude
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, renting
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house
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a house
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 has plenty
advantages
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of advantages
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,
as
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such as
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 flexibility and mobility,
however
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, there are some cons, like limited control and privacy, which later can cause big stress.

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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clarity and precision in its structure. There is a noticeable difficulty in organizing ideas coherently, which impacts the logical flow of the essay. To enhance the coherence and cohesion, it's crucial to establish a clear introduction, followed by distinct paragraphs for each main point and a succinct conclusion. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence and subsequent sentences should directly support the main point, creating a natural progression of ideas.
task achievement
Although the essay attempts to address the prompt by discussing advantages and disadvantages of renting, the response is somewhat underdeveloped. There are limited details and the examples provided are not fully elaborated. To improve task achievement, ensure that the essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt. Provide clear, comprehensive ideas with adequately developed examples and explicitly link them back to the prompt to demonstrate their relevance.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • mobility
  • upfront costs
  • maintenance
  • repairs
  • amenities
  • property taxes
  • long-term commitment
  • control
  • privacy
  • rent increase
  • restrictions
  • customization
  • investment
  • tenure
  • dependency
  • landlords
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