The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram displays the proportion of government spending on health care in five European nations in
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specific year and
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the proportions of employees
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between 24 and 30 years old in medical service.
Overall
, the proportion of government spending was around 11% ,
Poland
and Italy had a minimum and maximum.
In contrast
, the percentages of young
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employees working in medical service were around 30%, except
Poland
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and Italy, which were relatively higher. To look at the data in more detail, Italy had the highest proportion of government spending, consisting of 27%. Iceland and Spain had a similar percentage, 11% and 13%, respectively.
Next,
Finland accounted for 9%.
Poland
was the lowest, which was 5%.
However
,
Poland
had a dramatically high percentage of young people working in medical service that was exceeding
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half. Italy was the second highest which consisted of 40%, followed by Spain which was 34%.
Lastly
, Iceland and Finland had relatively low percentages compared to other countries, both of them being less than 30%.
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