The pie charts show the reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts demonstrate why people emigrated from and immigrated to the
UK
in 2007. Looking from an
overall
perspective, immigration to the
UK
was primarily related to occupational and educational reasons
while
emigration from
this
country was mostly for work only. Looking at the charts, it is evidently apparent that definite jobs were the most common
reason
for both entering and leaving the
UK
, with 30% of
UK
immigrants going to
this
country and 29% of the emigrants leaving it
for
this
reason
, respectively. The figures for formal study,
on the other hand
, indicate a contrasting trend. Whilst
this
was the second-most-popular
reason
for immigrating to the
UK
(at 26%), only 4% of the
UK
students left their country for
further
education, representing the least chosen
reason
in the emigration chart. Turning to the emigration chart, looking for a job was the second runner-up incentive why people emigrated from the
UK
in 2007, with more than one-fifth of emigrants choosing
this
reason
(22%)
while
in the former chart, it accounts for only a bit more than a tenth of
UK
leavers (12%).
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