The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information regarding
average
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the average
temperature
every month in three
top cities. Correct article usage
the three
Overall
, it was noticeable that Paris
and dubai
had similar fluctuations Change the capitalization
Dubai
of
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in
average
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an average
the average
number of
temperatures of Correct quantifier usage
apply
three
major cities.
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the three
Paris
and Dubai
had similar pattern
of fluctuation of Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
temperature
. In January, Paris
stood at 5 celcius
of Correct your spelling
celsius
temperature
of the city, whereas
Dubai
began the temperature
of the city at 20 celcius
. The Correct your spelling
celsius
temperature
of both of them rose gradually until July. The numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
celcius
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celsius
of
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in
Dubai
increased in August, then
fell dramatically in December at under 25 celcius
. Correct your spelling
celsius
In addition
, Paris
passed the stable condition of temperature
between July and August. Afterwards, There was a gradual drop in temperature
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the temperature
of
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in
Paris
between August to December at 5 celcius
.
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celsius
Lastly
, Sydney started the number of
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temperature
in January at almost 25 celcius
. From July to February remained number of Change the capitalization
Celcius
celcius
at almost 25. Next,
there was a significant fall of
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in
temperature
until
from March to July. Sydney reached Change preposition
apply
lowest
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the lowest
of
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temperature
in July, namely under 15 celcius
. Correct your spelling
celsius
Then
, the temperature
rose significantly from July to December at under 25 celcius
.Correct your spelling
celsius
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