The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information regarding
average
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the average
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temperature
every month in
three
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the three
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top cities.
Overall
, it was noticeable that
Paris
and
dubai
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Dubai
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had similar fluctuations
of
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in
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average
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an average
the average
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number of
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apply
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temperatures of
three
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the three
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major cities.
Paris
and
Dubai
had similar
pattern
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patterns
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of fluctuation of
temperature
. In January,
Paris
stood at 5
celcius
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celsius
of
temperature
of the city,
whereas
Dubai
began the
temperature
of the city at 20
celcius
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celsius
. The
temperature
of both of them rose gradually until July. The
numbers
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of
celcius
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celsius
of
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in
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Dubai
increased in August,
then
fell dramatically in December at under 25
celcius
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celsius
.
In addition
,
Paris
passed the stable condition of
temperature
between July and August. Afterwards, There was a gradual drop in
temperature
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the temperature
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of
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in
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Paris
between August to December at 5
celcius
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celsius
.
Lastly
, Sydney started the
number of
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temperature
in January at almost 25
celcius
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Celcius
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. From July to February remained number of
celcius
at almost 25.
Next,
there was a significant fall
of
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in
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temperature
until
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from March to July. Sydney reached
lowest
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the lowest
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of
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temperature
in July, namely under 15
celcius
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celsius
.
Then
, the
temperature
rose significantly from July to December at under 25
celcius
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celsius
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, paris, dubai, celcius with synonyms.
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