The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003 to 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003 to 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart compares
frequency
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the frequency
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of using
Internet
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the Internet
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by
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a seperate
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seperate categorie
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separate categories
of people in terms of age in
UK
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the UK
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druing
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during
a period of 4
years
between 2003 and 2006.
Overall
, throughout 4
years
the youth
at age
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of
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16-24 were at the top list of
Internet
users
while
olp
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old
people who were more than 65 showed the least interest
toward
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in
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this
phenomenon.
Moreover
, in 2005, the rate of
internet
customers among 25-44 and 45-54 year-old ones were the same. As the figures
shows
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,
the
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seniors with 16-24 year-old were accounted for the most noticeable consumers at 80%, in 2003 and 2004, and 90 and 100% in 2005 and 2006 respectively.
while
there was a constant increase in
percentage
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the percentage
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of being interested in
use
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the use
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of
internet
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the internet
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at
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in
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second
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the second
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group with 50,60,70 and 80
percent
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per cent
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from 2003 to 2006 in turn.
On the other hand
, during a period of 4
years
,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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of users with 45-54 rose from 60-80.
In addition
, there
was
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were
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no important changes during 2003-2005 in 55-64
years
old
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people in attention to
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the internet
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internet
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and it reached
to
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50% in 2006 from less than 40% in 2005.
Interstingly
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Interestingly
, less than 20%
og
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of
elderly
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the elderly
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with more
that
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than
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65 utilized
internet
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the internet
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • adults
  • age groups
  • Internet
  • daily users
  • increase
  • significantly
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • contrast
  • smallest
  • followed closely by
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