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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given tables present the numerical data about Faitrade-labelled coffee and
bananas
selling
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sold
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 in five
countries
 within Europe between 1999 and 2004.
It
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It is
It was
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 obvious that coffee
were
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was
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 sold very well in
UK
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the UK
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 compared with in other four
countries
 and the
sales
 volume soared by nearly 15 times.
On
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 the same time,
bananas
experiences
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experience
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 the same pattern of selling in
switzerland
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Switzerland
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 as well dramatical ascending from 15
milliions
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millions
million
 of euros to 47
millions
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million
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. Except in
UK
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the UK
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 and Switzerland, the increasing quantities of
sales
 are not that stunning in
other
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the other
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 three
countries
,
while
 the
sales
 of
bananas
 in Belgium
have
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 relatively higher upward the figure increased from 0.6
millions
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million
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 in 1999 to 4
millions
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million
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 in 2004
closely
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nearly
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 7 times.
In addition
,
bananas
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banana
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slaes
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sales
 volume saw a decline in
sweden
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Sweden
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 and
in
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apply
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Denmark from 1999 to 2004, and only
bananas
 volume
of
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apply
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sales
 decreased in 2004 in those two
countries
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, countries, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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