The diagrams below give information about the manufacutre of frozen fish pies.

The diagrams below give information about the 

manufacutre of frozen fish pies.
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The diagram illustrates the various steps used to make a
fish
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cake using some of the ingredients.
Overall
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, the processing of
fish
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pie
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starts with getting potatoes for the process of making pies with salmon
fish
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to the dispatched to the stores. First of all, manufacturing of pies are starts with getting yam in the factory with the help of a delivery truck after that it will be the potatoes
then
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operations like peeling, and cutting done with the help of manual labour or automated
Then
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potatoes
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the potatoes
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are boiled in fresh water in a stove after that these chips are chilled with a freezer of the chiller are installed in the rollers. After that, it will stored in bags in a chiller place.
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, for
fish
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pie
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salmon
fish
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used for
this
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fish
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delivered to the factory within 12 hours because it needs to be fresh after getting
fish
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is cut into small sections lime juice and salt are sprinkled on the
fish
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after
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this
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operation cut the
fish
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goes to the steam oven to get streamed fry
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some workers are used to remove the skin and bones after that
fish
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will inspected
then
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get a peas and prepared
fish
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in bowl after that pour a sauce in the bowl. At
last
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, potato is added to the bowl to make the
pie
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in the
last
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step the
pie
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will be packed in the container after that with the help of roller containers are sent to the freezer to dispatch the
pie
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to the stores and restraint in a frozen box.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, pie with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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