IELTS WRITING Task 1. The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

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The given line graph shows the percentage of visitors to Brighton Attractions in England between 1980 and 2010. The units were measured in percentage and divided

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into

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four attractions, which are

Art

Correct article usage

the Art

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gallery, Pavilion, Pier and Festival.

Overall

, it can be clearly seen that

Pavilion

Correct article usage

the Pavilion

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experienced the highest peak

whereas

Art Gallery visitors dropped in the

last

year. In terms of Art Gallery

tourist

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tourists

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, started at just

abouve

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above

20% in 1980. In the following year, the percentage rocketed to approximately 38% in 1985 before

encoutering

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encountering

a significant drop in 1990 at

pricesely

Correct your spelling

precisely

20% and gradually decreased until reached the lowest point at 8% in 2010. Meanwhile, the Pavilion

intilally

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initially

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was at

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23% in 1980 and hit

the

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its

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peak at

almost

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the almost

an almost

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doubled number in 1995.

However

, the trend

then

considerably

falled

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fell

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5 years later and went down moderately

reached

Wrong verb form

reaching

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30% in 2010. Regarding the Pier,

begin

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began

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at exactly 10%

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1980 and experienced a

flucuative

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fluctuating

fluctuation

trend between 1985 and 2000. After that, the figure increased gradually and hit at just 20% in 2010.

Lastly

, the Festival stood at 30% as the highest proportion compared with

another attractions

Replace the adjective

another attraction

other attractions

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in 1980 and the number

relatively

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was relatively

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stable until 2010, at 28%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

196 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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IELTS WRITING Task 1. The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

Some people say it is acceptable to use animals for our benefit, others say it is wrong to exploit them. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argure that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective.

In some rich countries, the number of children at secondary or high school who are the science subject is declining. What effect might this have on the children's and their countries future? How can children be encouraged to study science?