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The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
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The bar chart provides information regarding the
percentage
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 of
money
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 spent by
individuals
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 in the UK for
charity
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 purposes by age range over two decades from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 more
people
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 gave their
money
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 to
charity
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 in the first period compared to the second.
Furthermore
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,
also
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 noteworthy is the fact that young
individuals
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 involved doing
charity
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, despite the
percentage
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 declining in the second period.
To begin
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 with, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 around the ages of 18 to 36 was higher in terms of giving
money
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 to others in 1990, accounting for around 85% collectively. In the same year,
individuals
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 between 51 and 65 were the second largest proportion of doing
charity
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, making up 35%, and it was higher than
people
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 aged 65 and over.
On the other hand
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, doing
charity
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 was a more popular activity for
individuals
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 around 51 and over, contributing to around 70
percent
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per cent
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 collectively in 2010.
While
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 the
percentage
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 of young
individuals
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 between the ages of 18 to 25 accounted for around 18%, the number of
people
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 around 36 to 50 years old who gave their
money
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 to
charity
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 doubled during the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, money, individuals, charity, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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