You are going on holiday and have just remembered that your aunt lives in one of the cities you will be visiting. Write a letter to your aunt. In your letter: * Tell her about your holiday plans * Ask if you can stay with her for a portion of the trip * Explain how you will make it up to her

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Dear Aunt Samira, I hope
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letter finds you well and in good health. My friend and I planned a short trip to Dubai for leisure and relaxation, and suddenly you popped into my mind.
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, I’m writing
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letter to inform you. Our flight is on 25th April and we booked a hotel near your property for 5 nights and I think if you are free on weekends, I would spend my time with you.
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, our itinerary was arranged by my friend, the first and second days have
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for shopping and sightseeing
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the
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two days have
belong
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skiing
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, safari and sports water, actually, the one day middle of the trip is free and I wanted to spend time each other and if you agree I can manage to schedule our plan.
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,
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I know you are very busy with your confectionery, I can help you make the cake as I learned the recipe from you a few years ago.
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I can stay with you that night if you want.
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, I think that night can be one of my
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days in our trip and my life.
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, it is going to be a great night because it reminds me of the past. I won’t forget your kind gesture. Warm wishes, Mustafa
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coherence cohesion
The structure of your paragraphs could be improved by clearly separating the distinct points from each other, ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
coherence cohesion
Emphasize a logical flow by using a range of cohesive devices, such as conjunctions and transition words, to better connect the ideas within and across paragraphs.
task achievement
The letter partially addresses the tasks. Make sure to fully explore each point of the prompt by expanding on your holiday plans in greater detail, explicitly asking to stay with your aunt, and more clearly outlining how you will compensate for the imposition.
task achievement
While the overall tone suits an informal letter, strive for consistency in formality and avoid jumps in topic to improve the reader's experience.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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