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IELTS The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

IELTS The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.
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The graph shows information about the percentage of
tourists
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 who visited Brighton attractions over a thirty-year period between 1980 and 2010. What stands out from the graph is that the
Pavilion
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 was by far the most popular attraction than that of the other attractions in question.
Overall
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, the Pier and
Pavilion
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 witnessed a rise in the proportion of
tourists
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,
while
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 the figures for the Festival and Art Gallery went down over the period shown. In 1980, the highest fraction of
tourists
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 (30%) was attracted to visit the Festival in Brighton.
This
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 value for the
Pavilion
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 and Art Gallery was almost 24 per
cent
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 and 22 per
cent
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, respectively. The proportion of Pier visitors was nearly 10 per
cent
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, which meant that it was visited less than the other attractions.
Following
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this
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, the figure related to the percentage of
tourists
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 who visited the
Pavilion
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 shot up and peaked at just under half of the total
tourists
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 in 1995 and
then
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 decreased significantly until 2010 by approximately 20%.
Although
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 the proportion of Festival visitors remained stable between 26 and 30 per
cent
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, the percentage of Art Gallery visitors experienced a considerable fall after hitting a peak at about thirty-seven per
cent
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 in 1985. Another interesting point is that the fraction of
Pavilion
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 attraction visits by
tourists
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 fluctuated until 2000, and
then
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 rose to just over one-fifth of
tourists
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, pavilion, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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