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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
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The pie charts draw the conclusion of
water
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 usage for a variety of reasons in different areas around the globe. The proportions are given in percentages.
Overall
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,
water
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 was mainly used for agricultural purposes in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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. Evidently, Europe and North
America
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 reported the greatest
water
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 utilisation in the industrial sector.
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,
water
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 supplied for domestic consumption was low in all places. Agricultural
water
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 use was dominant in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 with 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively. As
such
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, it can be seen
these
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 areas that the agriculture sector was responsible for a large majority of
water
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 utilised.
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, all these continents
states
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 that industrial avenues claimed the least amount of
water
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 accounting for around 7% each.
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, it can be observed that using
water
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 domestically was not significant contributing to about one-tenth of the whole each,
however
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, in South
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America
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America,
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 it boasted a
whooping
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whopping
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 19%. Utilising
water
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 industrially was significant in Europe and North
America
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 comprising
of
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one-half each.
Moreover
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,
water
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 used for agriculture in North
America
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 was 39% and in Europe 32%. Both continents claimed domestic use was near 15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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