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The charts compare the percentage of water used in different areas of the world.

The charts compare the percentage of water used in different areas of the world.
The charts compare the percentage of
water
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 used in different areas of the world. The six area settings range from North
America
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 to Southeast
Asia
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 and show significant differences between industrial
use
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, agricultural
use
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, and domestic
use
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.
According to
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 the charts,
firstly
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, agricultural
use
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 predominated over
water
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use
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 in all areas.
For instance
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, over 70
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percent
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per cent
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 of the
water
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 used is spent on farming. Only Europe and North
America
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use
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 less than 40
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percent
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per cent
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 of their
water
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. Meanwhile, Central
Asia
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 accounts for up to 88
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percent
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per cent
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 of the consumption of
water
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 in the agricultural sector.
Second,
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the consumption of 
water
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 for industrial
use
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 in North
America
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 and Europe is about a half portion. And the rest shows
about
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apply
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not more than 12
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percent
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per cent
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.
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, Africa only uses 7
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percent
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per cent
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water
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 for its manufacturing industry. On the other end of the scale, domestic
use
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 is the smallest percentage. South
America
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 has 19
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percent
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per cent
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, and the biggest portion compares to others, which all figure under 13
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percent
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per cent
show examples
.
Thus
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, Central
Asia
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 and Southeast
Asia
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 are in the bottom two; both of them have 7
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percent
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per cent
show examples
.
Overall
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, agricultural
use
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 is more likely to hold
water
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 in all areas around the world. Industrial
use
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,
on the other hand
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, predominates in North
America
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 and Europe.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, use, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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