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The given table shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005

The given table shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005
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The table
illutrates
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illustrates
 the proportion of use of different fossil
energy
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 types to produce electric power in five Asian countries in 2005.
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, Malaysia and Singapore were the biggest customers of coal and lignite
while
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 the remaining countries primarily used nuclear, petroleum, hydroelectric and wind or other powers
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 of coal and lignite for the year 2005. In 2005, Malaysia and Singapore were the biggest customers of coal with 61% and 42% respectively. The proportion of
energy
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 production by nuclear power was almost
a
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half in Japan and
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followed
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 by South Korea with around a
third,
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however
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, Singapore mainly used
Hydroelectic
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Hydroelectric
 centrals and wind turbines in order to generate electricity with just below
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half. Thailand was an
exeptional
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exceptional
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energy
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 in 2005,
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, they dominantly produced
energy
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 from petroleum products and other
energy
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 sources varied between 36% and 42%. The total
energy
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 production from other sources
of
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 Japan and South Korea was
also
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 39% in 2005.
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