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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The illustrated graph provides information about the popularity of public
transport
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 in a particular country, among different residents over a period of time. In brief, the usage of public
transport
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 was higher in large cities of all
ages
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, with a huge difference from other sites in the country.
To begin
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 with, the population over 60 were not fans of using these services both big city residents and those from other parts of the country.
Moreover
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,
this
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 occasion was not only for old
ages
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, even people from young
ages
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 were not familiar with public
transport
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 as well.
according to
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 the given information, the average number of users among other residents where less than 30% for all
ages
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.
Secondly
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, individuals between the
ages
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 of 31 to 45 where mostly like to use public
transport
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 in large cities, which Is almost similar to the number of people around the age of 16 to 30. Look in more detail, teenage mankind and the ones above 46 to 60 were using
this
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 development in the same way with almost 40% of users.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • urban areas
  • rural areas
  • public transport usage
  • peak usage
  • lowest usage
  • highest usage
  • significant difference
  • notable trend
  • patterns
  • residence location
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