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■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of British people who gave donations to charity between 1990 and 2010. The units are measured in per cent and divided into five range
age
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groups
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.
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, it can be clearly seen that the majority of the donors come from
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 35 until more than 65 years old.
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, the percentage of both two different years in the three older
age
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groups
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 had a small gap. In terms of the smaller
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groups
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 started with 18-25, only 17% in 1990 and the figure dropped to just above 5% in 2010.
This
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 similar trend
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 occurred in the
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groups
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 of 26 - 36, with the number in 1990 doubled compared with the 18 - 25
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 group and in 2010 just below 25% giving money to charity.
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, the 36 - 50
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 group, in 1990 was the highest percentage in all
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groups
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, with 43% and precisely 35% in 2010. The
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 two
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groups
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 show a different condition, the proportion of the year 2010 in both
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groups
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 has a higher percentage compared with the year 1990. 51 - 65, in 1990 exactly 35% of people donated to charity and the figure increased in 2010 to just below 40%.
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, a similar gap
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 happened in the 65+
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 group, at 33% in 1990 and grew by 2% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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