The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The graph compares the proportion of males and females in Australia who had regular exercise during 2010 on the basis of different periods of age. At first glance, it can be seen that in
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country, generally, women were more active in comparison with
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in 2010. In their old
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both genders were on the same level in terms of physical activities. Regarding women, they are just less active than
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at the youth age at around 47%.
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spell of their lives, almost half of them became more active particularly, between the age of 45 to 54. What stands out is the figures for males and females in the oldest bunch was approximately equal, 47%. Focusing on
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these data, Youngsters had more regular physical activities than females by 5%.
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rate dramatically decreased to a little less than 40% in the mid-thirties. After that, the percentage of
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gradually increased to 46.7 when they were elderly.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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