The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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expenditure

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countries over 10 years.

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millions

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in 1995

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in 1999 and five years later it

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books

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fees

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Austria

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which it was began

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france

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in 1997

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about 55

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decreased to exactly 50

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after that, it

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, millions, dollar, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
44Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

167 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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