The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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expendiure

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expenditure

expenditures

books

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in 4

difference

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countries over 10 years.

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, the all countries were growing

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particularly

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, the main

books

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fees were in Germany over the whole

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, the most

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fees consumed

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german

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millions

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in 1995

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, slightly rose to reach exactly 90

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in 1999 and five years later it

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100

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millions

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dollar

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other

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least consuming

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books

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fees

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Austria

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which it was began

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million

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dollas

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dollars

in 1995

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slightly increased by 10

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millions

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dollars it constant over

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years

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substintial climed more than half

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millions

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in 2005. Comparing

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france

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and

italy

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in 1997

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about 55

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then

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france

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keep

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its steady

increased

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until

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its peak

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approximately

above 70

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dollar

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opposite

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was

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decreased to exactly 50

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, millions, dollar, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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digital reading platforms
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cultural influence
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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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