Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behaviour both on and off the field can have negative influences. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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professional athletes are the pride of every country and they serve as positive role models for every
level
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of generations including
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youngsters
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behaviour on and off the field does influence young people easily as they are their inspiration to success .
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professional athletes
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are motivated
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to always aim higher and it comes with
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great work and discipline
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tournament or championship they have to enrol
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needs
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some sort of
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and
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perseverance
for them to be professional
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athletes
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in
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the national
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level
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, our former national
badminton
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player
lee chong
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wei , he has trained
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badminton
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since he was a child.
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has
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been to different
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level
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of championship and
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has made him one of the best
badminton
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player
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players
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in the world. because of his
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many youngsters
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started to know about
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.  every match or
tournaments
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may have some sort of disagreement or dissatisfaction among players or opponents
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football match between a referee and a player.
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Introduction
Ensure the introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines the structure of the essay. Include both sides of the argument and a clear thesis statement.
Body paragraphs and task achievement
Develop both arguments fully, providing specific examples and detailed explanations for each side before presenting your opinion.
Conclusion
Include a conclusion that summarizes the main points of the essay and clearly states your opinion, maintaining a neutral and formal tone throughout.
Coherence & Cohesion
Write coherent paragraphs with clear topic sentences that relate to the central argument. Use linking words appropriately to connect ideas.
Language usage
Avoid grammatical errors and informal language. Use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures to demonstrate language proficiency.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • behaviour
  • field
  • positive influences
  • negative influences
  • hard work
  • dedication
  • discipline
  • determination
  • healthy lifestyle
  • fitness
  • perseverance
  • challenges
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • controversial behavior
  • substance abuse
  • legal issues
  • materialism
  • excessive spending
  • responsibility
  • accountability
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