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The table below shows how patients evaluate different services at three health center. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluate different services at three health center. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided chart gives information about the satisfaction situation with 5 different
services
 in some specific health centres. In brief, Longstone
Center
 had the poorest impact on its customers and
on the other hand
, Peveril
Center
 were the most popular among its patients.
To begin
 with, Peveril
Center
 act almost excellently in every aspect scoring 8.3
overall
 and almost 100% satisfaction in response to concerns and booking appointments. Even their lowest score for Pharmacy
services
 was 6.3 which is higher than the other 2 centres.
Moreover
,
care
Correct article usage
the care
show examples
 of children and Doctors
services
 have done a good job as well.
In addition
, Marchbank
Center
 have a quite good score just like mentioned first one with an average of 7.2
overall
however
 different in details.
For example
, having 8.4 points in Doctor
services
 is the most popular aspect and Booking appointments is the second place. Care of children, Response to concern and Pharmacy with a lower point in order.
However
, the
overall
 average points of Longstone
Center
 was less than 6 which made
this
 centre stand in third place among all 3. The strongest aspect of
this
 health clinic was Doctors’
services
 and the weakest was Response to concern with only 4.3 points.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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