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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
#expenditure #three #categories #age #groups #residents #uk
the bar chart gives us information about
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the persentage
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persentage
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percentage
 of total spending on food and drink,and
restourant
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restaurants
 and
hotel
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hotels
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,
also
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and also
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the entartaiment
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entartaiment
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entertainment
. between different
group
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groups
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 of age in
UK
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the UK
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 in 2004 .
overall
,it can be seen that citizens were spending the most
mony
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money
 on foods and drinks in
their
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those
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over 76 years old
that is
 the same for
intertaimnet
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entertainment
in
their
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those
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 over61 to 75 ,
however
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,
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the lowest expenditure was for restaurant and
hotel
 when they were over 61 and lower 75 years old . in
term
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terms
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 of
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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, individuals in
Uk
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the Uk
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 when they were younger ( under 30)
they
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apply
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were
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interested
intrested
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interested
to
spen
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spend
money
 on them by slightly below %15 percentage , rather than other things in 2004 ,
however
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,
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they have been spending more
money
 on food and drink when they were between 31 and 60 around approximately from 13% to 16 % , regards to over
ages
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age
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, residents in England have spent
lot
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a lot
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sof
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of
money
 on both food and drink ,
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and entertaiment
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entertaiment
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entertainment
 as well by the same
persentage
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percentage
 which was less or more than %23 when they were between 61 and over in their age .
although
 people in 2004
in
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apply
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Britain
they
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apply
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spend
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spent
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 less amount
money
 on
restuarant
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restaurants
 and
hotel
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hotels
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. which was less than %10 percentage
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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