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You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * Congratulate him/her for also being accepted * Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate * Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together

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Dear Amir, I hope you are great. I’m writing to tell you about catching up at the
university
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University
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 of
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Digital Marketing
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 in Paris,
Frace
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France
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. I was searching
my
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for my
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 name in university admission and I realized your name was above the list. You don’t know how much I was over the moon
that
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 moment. Congrats to you. I'm certain your family will be proud of you.
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, If you agree, after relocation we can be roommates and share everything with each other. Undoubtedly, your family will be happy to be roommates because we have a lot of experience and recollection. In fact, we grew up together. I’m so excited about doing things together in Paris. We would do plenty of things
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 as watching movies, reading books in the library,
playing
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and playing
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 game
board
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 and even if we can
enroll
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 in the French language institute
then
 we can better communicate with other people.
Then
 go to the gym every morning and we can do everything that we can imagine. I’m waiting for your reply from you
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about
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 the reservation of
dormitory
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the dormitory
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 Warm wishes, Mustafa
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to provide a clear introduction, logical progression of ideas, and a satisfying conclusion to leave a strong last impression.
coherence cohesion
Keep paragraphs focused on a single idea to ensure clarity and ease of reading.
task achievement
Ensure all aspects of the task are fully covered, giving equal attention to each point to provide a complete response.
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Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter, appropriate for the context and relationship with the reader.
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