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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart shows, by frequency, the percentages of
people
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 in the USA who ate in
fast-food
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 outlets between 2003 and 2013.
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, in all three years, the two largest groups were those eating in
fast-food
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 restaurants once a week and those eating there once or twice a month. Those eating there daily and those never eating there, in comparison, accounted for the smallest proportions.
People
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 eating in
fast-food
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 outlets once a week represented the largest segment of
people
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 in the USA in both 2003 and 2006, at about 31% and 33% respectively.
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, the percentage dropped to roughly 27 in 2013. The proportion of those who fell into
"once
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the "once
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 or twice a month" category first declined from 30% to 25% between 2003 and 2006. It
then
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 went up significantly to around 33% in 2013, making
this
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 category the largest that year. The proportion of those eating in
fast-food
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 restaurants several times a week varied between 15% and 20%,
while
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 the
propotion
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proportion
 eating there a few times a year showed an increase from approximately 13% to 15% over the period.
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, in any year, the "every day" and "never" categories
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contained no more than 5% of
people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, fast-food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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