Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
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such
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the opposite
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As far as I'm concerned, appetite is formed gradually as we grow, based on what we eat. Linking Words
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such
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, it is considerable that Linking Words
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increasing
price
can be an avoidable option as people try to buy those products or foods more cautiously. Fix the agreement mistake
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, they may use less of these items Linking Words
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health threatening
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and so on.
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rising Correct your spelling
although
price
can be a preventing Fix the agreement mistake
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soulution
to help Correct your spelling
solution
indivuduals
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individuals
eating
less unhealthy things, they should educate and get Wrong verb form
eat
habits
of having Correct article usage
the habits
healthy
diet from their childhood in order to Correct article usage
a healthy
becoming
part of their lifestyle and do it without any Change the verb
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