Task 1: The chart below shows the water levels of 6 cities in Australia in October 2009 and 2010.
The chart demonstrates the water
extents
percentages in 6 cities in Australia commencing from 2009 to 2010. Fix the agreement mistake
extent
Overall
, there was an upward trend in the levels of water in Melbourne, Perth, Sydney, and Canberra
, while
Darwin experienced the opposite state. Brisbane was the only city Correct pronoun usage
that remains
remains
static in both Wrong verb form
remained
period
of time.
Sydney and Change to a plural noun
periods
Canberra
were the tops
2 with nearly reached around 80 Fix the agreement mistake
top
percents
in 2009, followed by Brisbane as the Fix the agreement mistake
percent
third,
and Perth along Darwin with the
rates approximately 40%. The Correct article usage
apply
least
water levels was experienced by Melbourne with Correct word choice
lowest
figure
Add an article
a figure
around
20%.
In 2010, Change preposition
of around
a develop
increased in four cities, Sydney, Perth, Melbourne, and Wrong verb form
development
Canberra
, with the highest rank gained by Canberra
reaching around 100%. While
Darwin had receding
just over a half Wrong verb form
receded
and
Brisbane Correct word choice
apply
remain
constant with Wrong verb form
remained
60
% figure in both years.Correct article usage
a 60
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canberra with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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