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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate measures of
electricity
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production
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 by various fuel sources in two different countries, Australia and France, between 1980 and 2000.
According to
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 the given data, the most
amount
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 of
electricity
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 manufacturing belonged to coal and hydropower during these years. The other sources were used to
power
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 manufacturing in the low
amount
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 respectively and the volume of these dropped a lot in the end.
In addition
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,
this
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 nation had not benefited from nuclear
power
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 at all. In France, we are witnessing that the usage
amount
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 of coal and oil has been stable approximately in
this
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 period.
However
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,
this
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 country even made
electricity
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 from nuclear energy. The usage
amount
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 of it has increased a lot
at the end
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 of the period. The rest sources were located in the low position respectively. The
power
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production
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 by other energies has decreased significantly.
To sum up
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, Australia has the most use of coal for
electricity
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production
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 compared to the others.
However
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, France had a suitable benefit from the nuclear
power
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 source to
electricity
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production
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, amount, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • units of electricity production
  • fuel source
  • dominant source
  • reliance on coal
  • hydroelectric power
  • natural gas
  • significant reduction
  • primary source
  • drastically increased
  • transition
  • existing infrastructure
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