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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

Traffic
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 jams have been a critical argument across
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global cities. There is a solution by developing the process of public transportation.there are viable measures that can be taken to mitigate the problem. There are several underlying causes of
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 situation. The primary factor is the increasing number of owned cars is the main reason behind major
traffic
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.
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 is because there is not enough space for a huge number of vehicles
traveling
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 on a street at the same time.
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,
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 situation is even made worse when the capacity of streets is not expanded to maintain the flow of
traffic
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 and everyone loves to sit in their private vehicle for their own convenience.
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 jams in Amman City now occur every day
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 the overload of private cars. To address these concerns, various potential actions can be taken.
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, the government should improve the infrastructure to avoid the crowds on the road.
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, Dubai
city
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 had plans for the next 30 years to avoid
traffic
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 in future.
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, if we do the same in Amman by
open
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a new ways
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 and
build
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 an impressive transportation station,
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 will lead people to
unuse
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 their own cars on public
road
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 by making
him
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 use the new transport method. In conclusion, a combination of factors has contributed to the deteriorating
traffic
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 in Amman.
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,
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 issue can be effectively addressed through the implementation of comprehensive plans and suggestions for
decision makers
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, it is imperative to take immediate steps to enhance the road. By doing so, we can ensure a perfect future for our countries.

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coherence cohesion
Your essay attempts to follow a structured approach with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but transitions between ideas are abrupt at times. Improve by using linking words and phrases to better connect sentences and paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and is developed logically.
task achievement
Even though you have addressed both the causes and the solutions to traffic congestion, your ideas are somewhat general and need better development to be fully responsive to the task. Make sure to clearly state the causes and solutions, and expand on these with more detailed explanations and specific, relevant examples.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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