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the diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelecritic power station.

the diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelecritic power station.
The diagram below reveals
that
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apply
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in what manner electricity could be produced in a hydroelectric
power
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statin
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station
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.
Overall
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, it has 5
stage
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stages
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 to generate the electricity, from
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water
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the water
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 of
river
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the river
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 pouring
in to
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into
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high-level
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a high-level
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 reservoir and
end
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ending
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 up with
power
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 lines.
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In
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To
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In
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 the
begennig
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beginning
, after
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throwing
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throw
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throwing
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 it to
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a high-level
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high-level
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a high-level
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reservior
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reservoir
then
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 passes through the dam that just
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in
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at
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in
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the day
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day
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the day
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 could be crossed, because at night it is
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closed
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close
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 for flowing of
water
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 during pumping. so ,
water
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 is exposed in reversible turbines of
power
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 station that in the day it faced on
operating
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the operating
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 generator,
whereas
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, at night
water
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 is pumped into
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the high-level
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 reservoir.
Then
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while
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 it is pumped up to
generator
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the generator
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 it will be produced national grid through the
power
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 line.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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