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Band 4.5

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows data about the proportion
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 number of people

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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